I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Tena koe Maia, Its your classmate Ruqayat. I really love you descriptive writing. It has very good similes and describing words. You also did a splendid job using your five senses. I just suggest you proof read you writing. It has some sentences that don't make much sense. Either way, beautiful writing! Keep up the good work!
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Tena koe Maia, Its your classmate Ruqayat. I really love you descriptive writing. It has very good similes and describing words. You also did a splendid job using your five senses. I just suggest you proof read you writing. It has some sentences that don't make much sense. Either way, beautiful writing! Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteKind regards~
Ruqayat