I am a Year 6 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia ora Maia, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I loved how you used your senses to imagine what you could see, hear and feel. Can you think of 2 more adjectives (describing words) to show what the poppies looked like?
Hello Maia, this is Michael Jackson well done of your work about poppies. but some of your writing was over done but great job anyway Sighed Michael Jackson/MJ
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Kia ora Maia, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I loved how you used your senses to imagine what you could see, hear and feel. Can you think of 2 more adjectives (describing words) to show what the poppies looked like?
ReplyDeleteHello Maia, this is Michael Jackson well done of your work about poppies. but some of your writing was over done but great job anyway Sighed Michael Jackson/MJ
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